Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In the midst of the technology-driven age, smartphones and computers are covered most of the daily facets such as education, entertainment, etc. With the multifunction in one machine, smartphones attract all the people regardless of their age, nation, etc. In this essay, I will give the justifiable reason that leads to this social phenomenon and give a conclusion that whether this trend tends to be positive or negative.
First and foremost, it is hardly unaccepted that smartphones play a dispensable role in our daily life. Children are easily impressed by these machines because they can satisfy all the demands of their owners from the top to the bottom. With just a few clicks and everything will exist on the screen, which allures the children to its convenience. Secondly, smartphones can download an unlimited number of free games which makes sure that children hardly get bored to put them down. Thirdly, smartphones are the best tools for children to interact with their rapports and kill their spare time. To cite an example, according to the data from the current record in the US, more than 75 percent of children in this nation have a chance to access smartphones at the initial age because their parents don’t have enough time to play or teach them. This motive can spur children close to an addict to these advanced gadgets.
Considering the effect of this phenomenon, it has both pros and cons. To be clear, cutting-edge technology from this equipment can make use of their multifunction and convenience. Thanks to its feature of searching the online solution, children no longer need to go to the extra class after school and the parents can save for a rainy day. Furthermore, with the help of apps on the website or play station, it can boost our children’s creativity and innovation due to the stunning design of the interface. For example, thanks to the advent of the technological phone, a major number of children in the world have a chance to attending in online classes in the widespread Covid-19. Without these bleeding-edge machines, we hardly get by the awkward circumstances and everything is procrastinated by the influence of disease, and war. However, attaching smartphones for a long time can make the student get used to a sedentary lifestyle. This is the determining factor causing obesity and poor eyesight in our pupils. Finally, if children remain in this behavior for a long time, it is challenging for us to keep the social cohesiveness due to the lack of socialization.
In conclusion, there are many motives that drive the children to this horrendous activity and the disadvantage we earn from its trends is outweigh its advantage. I personally believe that this phenomenon influences negatively the children’s maturity and even adversely affects their mental and physical health.
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 467.0 315.596192385 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07922912206 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98225981465 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533190578158 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 730.8 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3781445565 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.952380952 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248391320112 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749115723456 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467981189858 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163270380447 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156478317836 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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