In some countries, advertisers increase the amount of advertising which tries to persuade children to buy snacks, toys and other goods. Parents object to such pressure on children. But some advertisers claim that there is useful information in these advertisements. Discuss both views and give your opinion
In recent years, children are encouraged to possess many different goods such as toys and foods by different brands’ advertisements. While some people suppose that some necessary messages are contained in these commercials, I would argue that this tendency prevents children from a healthy lifestyle.
On the one hand, the benefits of commercials are undeniable when children are allowed to have access closely new and modern technological devices. This means that nowadays some smart toys such as Rubik or construction models might help children to reinforce their intelligence by playing with them regularly. Take an example for Rubik, when they have an opportunity to hear the merits and the function of playing this game, which activates the curiosity of children. As a result, playing with these toys helps to develop their cognitive thinking and creativity, which they could apply to their academic study later on.
On the other hand, I believe that these advertisements bring about some negative impacts. Firstly, to create a higher demand, these companies often exaggerate the functions and qualities of their products, which will make consumers, especially children appreciate and desire to have them. This makes children disappointed when they experience authentic goods by themselves or even they do not use them anymore. This leads to a waste of money and affects adversely children’s mood because of their expectations. Moreover, due to being affected by advertisements about indoor games or junk foods, children tend to overuse these things. Consequently, children easily suffer from obesity or depression and might have a sedentary lifestyle, which impacts their future independent lives.
In conclusion, although there are some clear merits of advertisements is produced by some great brands, I believe that these advertisements bring about negative impacts to children’s awareness and habits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59931506849 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97721337719 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595890410959 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5052567437 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.769230769 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317698897322 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115093285835 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812670055459 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211397287051 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747964315033 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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