Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In some nations, the senior citizens are permitted to work indefinitely as long as they wish, which is still controversial among a majority of people. From my perspective, I suppose that the disadvantages are predominant.

It is plausible why old people should retire at a particular age. The first conspicuous reason is that their well-being is hardly favourable to the workplace any longer. It is evident that the elderly are more likely to contract a disease due to immune deficiency or health deterioration, which diminishes their proficiency at work. The second rationale is that further escalation in unemployment rate could be attributable to old people who are still working after their age of retirement. With a substantial number of veteran superiors at the office, subordinates seem to stand fewer chances of fulfilling their potential or getting promotion, and there are not even enough places for youngsters who desire to find an occupation.

On the other hand, granting the elderly permission to work to any age that they want does have some advantages. Provided that their general health is favourable, old people can earn a living by themselves without depending on governmental allocation or their children. This not only facilitates their financial independence but also provides them with an enjoyable working life, which assists the senior both mentally and physically. For instance, some of the retired do not have an excuse to go out anymore, and begin to lead a sedentary lifestyle, or just idle away the time. In this case, old people might aspire to come back to their work.

In conclusion, advantageous to some extent as it may seem, allowing the elderly to work longer still causes certain drawbacks. Moreover, after a considerable period of their profound contribution, the old generation should relax, enjoy life and spend time with their family.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 449, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... mentally and physically. For instance, some of the retired do not have an excuse to go out...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, well, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24834437086 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01907775486 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619205298013 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9738723491 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.214285714 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282650958055 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095391410123 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726513972798 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15632324991 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426806676701 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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