In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Over the past decade, the alarming issue of raising the average heft of humans and their health and fitness deterioration has never ceased to draw public attention and challenge experts who have been researching on nutritional aspects. To the best of my knowledge, excessive consumption of junk food as well as lack of physical activities are main culprits to spark this above problem. I’m of the opinion that it is immensely thought-provoking to analyze these reasons before any viable measures can be drawn to tackle this affair.
One of the conspicuous causes contributing to increasing numbers of obesity cases is the extremely intriguing appearance of fast food or junk food which leads to people consuming an uncontrollable amount. Currently, most of children in big cities have been obsessed with some kinds of western cuisine such as fried chicken, pizza, French fries… Furthermore, even adult people, usually swamped by works and pressure of earning for living, tend to get takeaways with high-fat content in order to save their time and overlook what truly healthy dietary habits are.
Additionally, a sedentary lifestyle without any workout exercise makes people losing their figure and hence their levels of health and fitness are worsening. Nowadays, both men and women prioritize their time budget being up to their neck on working to not only serve their essential demands but also pursue their career path as a new trend of young generation and lack time for other activities like working out. Moreover, due to the explosion of technology with a typical product as smartphones, people have been increasingly addicted to the internet in order to satisfy their needs on entertaining. Two listed real situations also result in becoming obese and gradually losing resistance power.
However, it will be not tough to deal with this affair if the government strive to raise people’s awareness of healthy habit by launching health campaigns as well as boost their spirit of changing sedentary lifestyle to healthy one which involves a lot of exercise activities. Besides that, enforcing rigorous censorship to advertisements of high-fat content foods and alarming effects of using them like diabetes, heart troubles… are effective ways to prevent people from excessively consuming harmful foods or products and getting heavier.
In conclusion, it is visible that people have been becoming heavier than before and so their health conditions have been falling down. To address/combat this issue, under no circumstances, should governments take action by launching health programs to change people’s mindset on a healthy lifestyle and censor more strictly toward advertising of high rich content products as well as emphasize negative influences of eating these products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42660550459 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87797156166 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623853211009 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1441902427 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.0 106.682146367 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5384615385 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198872438016 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639669118917 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344620389108 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992561287314 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240173141786 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 13.0946893788 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.38 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 78.4519038076 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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