Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The effect of technology in our life nowadays has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although it is strongly considered by some that technology has initiated numerous methods to help people easier on communicating, the issue as to whether the technology impacted in a positive or negative manner in how people communicate with each other remains controversial. To the best of my knowledge, I am of the opinion that this is an immensely debatable matter to be analyzed in light of several aspects before any conclusion can be drawn.
On one hand, it is visibly recognized that thanks to technology, there are increasingly developed approaches to facilitate the interaction of people and to also short space of human-being communities. Based on these approaches, a person can get on well with other persons despite far distances and keep in touch and keep updated what happening without being beside them. For example, in the past, being in high-school without any supporting tools to contact with my family, I just came back to my hometown once a month by traveling by bus, to visit my family, update their advice and let my mom updated my situation on studying. That was the reason why during the high school-learning period, I rarely talked with my mother and shared with her about my problems. At the moments, in spite of working as far as more 2000 km from my home, I’m able to sufficiently update about my mother's daily activities in order to ensure her health by just clicking in Messenger application to see her extremely clearly. This example indicates that technology has enhanced the human’s relationships closer, more intimate, and more comprehensive by making tools user-friendly that people can connect more regularly.
On the other hand, it is undeniable the fact that by using technology, people compulsively depend on the utilities to interact with each other instead of being in-person to directly communicate with them. Meanwhile, it is important to recognize that in some kinds of relationships, directly interacting effectively influences on emotional feelings which are roots of each relationship. Without these feelings, every connection between people also becomes virtual, less honest and less quality. For instance, at the moment, a lot of parents give their offsprings phone to play and run out their free time and not spend time talking, sharing and asking them about their emotion, their studying. Instead, these parents, who are also as victims of technology as phubbers, immerse themselves in using technology for entertainment and working purposes. There is a lack of comprehension between peoples and children which is strongly rising and has become an alarming issue recently. This example shows that somehow technology negatively impacts on how people distribute leisure time on warming up their relationships, even the intimate ones.
In conclusion, under no circumstances, does technology play a vital role in positively changing the way people interact with others by creating useful methods to shorten space and limits on communicating between people. Nevertheless, we should not ignore the severely negative consequences of using technology compulsively which leads to not pay attention on their real and intimate relationships needed interacting directly or in person. Hence, the essential lesson on controlling and how to use technology effectively has still been a demanding question for each person, including me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ople easier on communicating, the issue as to whether the technology impacted in a positive o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 41.998997996 233% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2938.0 1615.20841683 182% => OK
No of words: 551.0 315.596192385 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33212341198 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05586794956 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 176.041082164 171% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546279491833 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 933.3 506.74238477 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.4764557795 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.631578947 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307911729549 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907675485077 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657207665881 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194224787858 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529915870701 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 78.4519038076 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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