In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Obesity is growing concern in most of developed nations as the number of exercising is decreasing. This can be primarily the unhealthy meal habits and due to the busy lifestyles that provide insufficient exercising times for people. Therefore, it becomes important to tackle this issue by initiating number of approaches such as mandatory exercising programs at work or restricting opening hours for unhealthy restaurants.
An inverse relationship has been found between health and obese levels in some countries especially in developed nations. More than half of Americans are overweighted and 30% among them found to be extremely obese which even risk their own lives. There are multifarious reasons for this issue but the primary causes could be the changing of eating habits and the lesser hours for exercises.
As society developed, the number of unhealthy and fast foods are earning its popularity rapidly and this has increasing people’s weights. McDonalds and Burger King type of food are getting popular for its convenient and easy meals at a cheaper price, which in fact has no nutrition value. This fast food causes various health issues as well as the level of weight.
Furthermore, the fast society has pressured people to take lesser time for outdoor activities which can cause the level of health and fitness in general public to be declining. People have to adopt the pace of fast moving societies which results in continuous studies and work. As a result, there will be lesser time for exercise and that can create this obese issue.
It becomes vital to find the appropriate solutions have had to be researched. Firstly, the local authorities can pressure organisation to provide mandatory programs where employees can take a time to conduct exercises during business hours. Since most of employees are spending the majority of their times at work, it would be difficult to make a private exercising time. Also, the strict regulations on opening hours for fast food restaurants can cut down the consumer’s bad eating habits.
In conclusion, the level of health and overweight has a strong correlation. Due to unhealthy eating habits and insufficient exercising times have had caused the public to become overweight in developed countries. To solve tissue, make a flexible with exercise during work hours and restricting fast food restaurants’ opening hours to improve people’s health should be sought.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 146, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ause the level of health and fitness in general public to be declining. People have to adopt t...
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Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
... exercises during business hours. Since most of employees are spending the majority of their time...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279445727483 0.247107183377 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.163972286374 0.155533422707 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.115473441109 0.0946595960268 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0300230946882 0.0501214627716 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0184757505774 0.0437548338989 42% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108545034642 0.122226691241 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0600461893764 0.0403226058552 149% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91239850366 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346420323326 0.0326793684256 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00230946882217 0.00163938923432 141% => OK
Determiners: 0.0762124711316 0.0861772015684 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0230946882217 0.021408717616 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013856812933 0.011925033212 116% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2446.0 1933.35771543 127% => OK
No of words: 388.0 316.048096192 123% => OK
Chars per words: 6.30412371134 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.404639175258 0.374742101984 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.298969072165 0.28420135186 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203608247423 0.203846283523 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.170103092784 0.137316102897 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91239850366 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.037074148 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523195876289 0.56093040696 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 57.782027951 60.7387585426 95% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4210526316 20.7743622355 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9439818792 49.517814964 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.736842105 127.492653851 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.7743622355 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.814263465372 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 50.3179598481 49.1944974215 102% => OK
Elegance: 2.10869565217 1.69124875643 125% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439231860449 0.332605444948 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0910081653734 0.102741220458 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0582505160978 0.0668466124924 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555596336874 0.534860350844 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0876885889113 0.148594505496 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170785885369 0.134430193775 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761078313453 0.0742795772207 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297294350001 0.324371583561 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0341245487324 0.0638462369009 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273288465711 0.228012699653 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499892598304 0.058150111329 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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