In some countries, children are overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be responsible for this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In many countries, young generation is becoming overweight and their health status is declining. While I agree in part that the government should have responsibility to deal with this issue, I also believe that parents should share this duty.
On the one hand, there are many factors for this unhealthy trend that related to the authorities. First of all, the number of fast food outlets are growing rapidly in recent years. The ingredients used to prepare an item are rich in fat contents and negatively affect a child’s health. The official should have conducted policies to limit the rate of obesity in children such as confining the consumption of fast food or advertisement on TV. Besides that, the government should adjust the school schedule to balance between physical and mental education. In fact, the overload exercises make students must stay at home and have no time for any sports activities.
On the other hand, parents is highly accountable for this issue. Most parents often worry about their child lack of nutrients for growing up. Hence, they are willing to get their offspring what they want, which lead to unhealthy eating habits. Futhermore, parents are bus with their jobs and not spend enough time on outdoor activities with their children, which turn children to have a sedentary lifestyle and harmful to their health. Parents should encourage their children to go out to take up sports and organize the scientific nutrition plant.
In conclusion, I would argue that the government should have full the duty of overweight and unhealthy lifestyle in young people, I personally agree that parents play a crucial role in this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12087912088 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66002675334 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7016320913 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8571428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185473841522 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623014370946 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503483346216 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128574744823 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503848145011 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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