Some countries encourage children to do paid work. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some countries encourage children to do paid work. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Children are motivated to work for pay by countries. Eventhough it has some benefits like improvement in financial status and exposure to the outside world, it has some drawbacks like disturbances to the basic education and future career of the children.

In case of advantages, paid work at a young may help children to improve their financial status. A earning child can support the family and contribute to the expenses and consequently, reduce the financial burden of the family. The other benefit is the exposure to the real outside world. Many things, be it doing business or a manual work, are better learnt from working than from studying, so children who work from their childhood have the opportunities to learn a lot before reaching their adulthood. For instance, China’s mining labourers, who have worked in the mining industry since they were 5 years old, found to have more knowledge than the mining engineering graduates. Thus, a child can improve its knowledge and financial status if it works from childhood

Conversely, the consequences of doing paid joba from a young age can devastating for a child. Firstly, the basic education, which every child must have, is completely disturbed by the work as children are unable to do two things at once. Secondly, the future career of the child is lost as a consequence of improper basic education. When a child is deprived of basic education, it can never learn the basic skills and climb the ladder in their career, rather ends up being exploited in slave jobs. This was evident in Meghalaya’s jute industry where the children are made to work 20 hours a day in order to prevent them from going to schools and make these children to depend on these jute industries forever for money. Therefore, a lack of basic education destroys a child's future

To conclude, children are made to do paid jobs in some countries. The advantages of this includes improvement of the child’s financial status and exposure to the outside world to learn many things, but paid jobs at a young age ruins a child’s education as well as its future career.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: An
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95786516854 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81196892474 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502808988764 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8178256019 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.071428571 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212903705147 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082719137991 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065573472703 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149936963518 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252767193858 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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