Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time jobs and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both sides
Working teens are today encouraged in many places as their parents believe that part time works would bring them a better transition to adulthood whereas others insist on studying. In my opinion, I strongly agree that benefits of part time working would outweigh its potential risks.
On the one hand, working adolescents would value money much more than those do not take jobs and they can also obtain many practical and useful financial lessons through working. They would as well acquire a great number of essential skills for their future career and their adulthood such as money and time management skills, soft skills, job skills, etc. Furthermore, working at an early age could give youngsters chances to discover new interests and talents that might lead them to potential careers and job options in the future. And lastly, holding a part-time job could promote their self-reliance and self-confidence, their maturity, their responsibility as well as could assist them to better understand themselves.
On the other hand, teenagers who do both working and studying at the same time usually do not consider schooling as their priority. Most of them often fail to balance the schedule between their school and their workplace and therefore cannot keep up with school assignments and other extracurricular activities. Additionally, juveniles involving too much working and too much money are more likely to be engaged in risky behaviours like drugs and alcohol.
In conclusion, part time working is hugely advantageous to teenagers even though there are still some drawbacks from it which are possibly overcome with the support and supervision from their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, lastly, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3320754717 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7651495395 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.782633653 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 141.3 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145562737164 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624366155101 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389590757533 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950571451711 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241398274178 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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