The bar chart shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

Essay topics:

The bar chart shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

The graphic illustrates the number of hours in which teenagers in Chester spent on seven activities each week over a 6-year period of time, from 2002 to 2007. Overall, the time for going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping was on the increase while the time for doing homework, doing sports and bowling was otherwise and there was a minor fluctuation in watching DVDs over the given period.

It is noticed that watching TV was the most popular activity which rose from 25 hours in 2002 to 40 in 2007, an almost double growth. Both going to pubs and shopping had a slight increase of 10 hours and 9 hours and made a total of 18 and 15 in 2007 respectively. On the other hand, adolescents in Chester devoted much less time to doing homework which started at 10 hours in 2002 and declined to 7 in 2007, doing sports which took up only 2 hours in the last year from the beginning of 10, and especially bowling which stayed under 5 hours through the entire span of time.

And lastly, watching DVDs activity had the same number of hours spent in 2002 and in 2007 which was 10 after reaching a peak of nearly 17 hours in 2004.

Votes
Average: 6.9 (42 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...even activities each week over a 6-year period of time, from 2002 to 2007. Overall, the time f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
lastly, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37914691943 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2909582006 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521327014218 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8772005747 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.1666666667 22.9334400587 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278723326186 0.215688989381 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163245278532 0.103423049105 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835846828127 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199063286078 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349376952524 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.79 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.72 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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