In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products. do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, many restaurants and supermarkets provide schools with money to help with advertising their junk food. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Personally, I think it is a negative development.
Generally speaking, supporters to this claim that giving fund to schools from these markets will help a lot for more facilities for students, which in turn will increase the quality of education. The more money given to schools, the more activities will be done. Activities may be like expanding the schools' playground, and students will play football in a wider place.
Another positive development is that the school itself can hire more teachers for students. For instance, if any schools suffer from a lack of teachers, because some female ones take maternity leave, they can hire new staff for students. This, in turn, will help in providing students with good educational facilities and no disturbance occurs.
However, many people argue against that because it can eventually affect student's health badly, and it will display its detrimental impact in the future. Junk food cannot be a trustworthy source of food to school children. It dramatically has serious consequences such as obesity, which mean putting on weight to a degree that you can not lead a normal life. I think that advertising such kind of food toa student in schools will have a serious impact on them as they do not realize the tremendous results of this food.
To sum up, advertising fast food in schools will help them financially. Though, it has a severe bad effect on the student's health. I think it is a negative development
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Suggestion: schools'; school's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, for instance, i think, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08823529412 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84260369402 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2109644206 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266674706735 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952303590801 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788417759598 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156767361545 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071619653316 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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