: In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities.
Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
With the booming development of the economy, especially after the industrial revolution, whether or not industries and businesses should move to rural areas which far away from the city center has drawn much discussion amongst the general public. Whilst many advocates claim that the government ought to enhance the implimentation of this statement, their opponents may argue otherwise. From my perspective, I inclined to the view that the merits of this action are outweigh its drawback.
On the one hand, it is true that forcing industrial companies to move to the countrysides is not easy, since its implimentation either time-consuming or prohibitive. The companies will have to pay a tremendous amount of money to construct new factories and facilities as well as recruit new employees. However, if the government support businesses in terms of finance and building permits, they will probably be motivated to execute this plan in the future.
Despite of some difficulties at the beginning, the relocation of industries and companies to rural areas benefits the entire society in the long run. Firstly, industrial waste is one of the reasons causing severe pollution in crownded cities, so moving to the countryside can alleviate the polluting situation in city centers, thereby improving the dwellers’ physical health. To illustrate, since the People’s committee of Ha Noi has introduced heavy fines to factories built in the center of the city, the air quality in Ha Noi has improved drastically recently, which contributed to the development of city children as well as the general health of old people. Secondly, relocating to rural areas is a solution to some urging problems such as traffic congestion and overpopulation, because the influx of provincial employees settling down in big cities will be plummeted considerably.
Ultimately, I would like to reiterate that the advantages of moving industries and businesses to provincial areas prevail over its shortcoming as it has positive impacts on the environment and democracy. In the near future, both the government and companies should take the initiative in implementing this procedure in order to attain a sustainable life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...view that the merits of this action are outweigh its drawback. On the one hand, it is t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40406976744 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15520288295 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578488372093 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6214864227 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.916666667 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258899356597 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824746678004 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450550371115 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146494237446 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03730587374 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.