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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities.Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics: In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities.
Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that industries and enterprises are being received encouragement from state governments to leave dowtown areas to regional zones. While drawbacks of this trend are evident, benefits towards companies themselves and community could overshadow these downsides.

On the one hand, there are two main shortcomings with regard to the change of location of firms into non-residential areas. Firstly, this could extend commuter's journey times. Since those workers mainly reside in city and town, it is so time-consuming that they have to take so long to get to their workplace. Besides, enterprises and factories are also at an disadvantage, seeing that their products are highly costly because of delivery fees to dowtown areas. As a result, they cannot maximise their profit and easily go bankrupt in the long run. To illustrate, the prices of pharmaceuticals and medicines would raise if those have to be delivered a long way with high fuel cost and customers would, therefore, are less accessible to these commodities, especially those with low income.

On the other hand, I maintain that these unfavorable qualities could be downplayed by long-term advantages towards both enterprises and community as a whole. Moving into regional areas means that factories could be erected larger without concerns acout constricted space as a case in city. Production lines, thereafter, could be expanded and the resultant productivity improments are obvious in the long term. Moreover, environmental-harmful by-products and environmental problems in residential areas such as air, water, and soil pollution could be dwindled away thanks to those movements. Traffic congestion would aso no longer the case in megacity due to the fact that all workers ahve to commute to their workplace which are located futher afield.

In conclusion, it seems to me that movement of industries and businesses to regional areas are far more benificial for both businesses themselves and community at large, although disadvantages are adverse to some extent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
..., enterprises and factories are also at an disadvantage, seeing that their product...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'areas'' or 'area's'?
Suggestion: areas'; area's
...munity as a whole. Moving into regional areas means that factories could be erected l...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, in short, such as, as a result, it is true, with regard to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46835443038 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13890872073 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617088607595 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4540589382 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1411246228 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046922300681 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670941133771 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114168552925 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822184821964 0.056905535591 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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