In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have competed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that a growing number of young people, including many graduates, are unable to leave home and become independent of their parents. While, there have many advantages, I believe that these are outweigh by drawbacks.
On the one hand, living with their parents after they graduated from university and looked for a job which have a lot of advantages. First, when young people live with their family, this help them easily to take care of their parents and sometime can saving a mount of money. In addition, living with parents can saving money such as a lot of money to buy or rent a house for them. Second, adults can sharing the bill or some story with their families. For example, if when they feel sad or uncomfortable about their work, young people can sharing with their parents to look for a solution.
On the other hand, there still have several drawbacks about living with their families. The first drawback relates to hard having an independent life. After they graduated from university, who need to buy or rent an apartment to easy go to work or have their own space. Because of continuing to live with their families usually make them depend on their parent more. In addition, they can lack experience about life which make them hard to survival in the world. For instance, when adults married and had a small family of them, who will be need a other house for their small family and sometime adults want to be in a quite place in own home.
In conclusion, although continuing to live with parents has some benefits, I would argue that the drawbacks are far greater.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...ny advantages, I believe that these are outweigh by drawbacks. On the one hand, livin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...asy go to work or have their own space. Because of continuing to live with their famili...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 547, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... small family of them, who will be need a other house for their small family and ...
^
Line 5, column 618, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('place') instead of another adjective.
...amily and sometime adults want to be in a quite place in own home. In conclusion, although...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68327402135 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37625974 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519572953737 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.568923624 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30479457191 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11756200631 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736132675358 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171578187391 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656533340798 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...ny advantages, I believe that these are outweigh by drawbacks. On the one hand, livin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...asy go to work or have their own space. Because of continuing to live with their famili...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 547, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... small family of them, who will be need a other house for their small family and ...
^
Line 5, column 618, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('place') instead of another adjective.
...amily and sometime adults want to be in a quite place in own home. In conclusion, although...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68327402135 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37625974 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519572953737 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.568923624 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30479457191 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11756200631 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736132675358 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171578187391 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656533340798 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.