In some countries, people are forced to retire when they reach a certain age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
These days, in some countries the older people are compulsory to retire when they reach 60 years old, which brings some benefits for them. However, beside some advantages, it also has somes disadvantages to individuals and society.
There are some pros in that people have to retire in a forced way. Firstly, when the older people are retired, they might spend much time on family and themselves. They concerntrated on their work in a long time and forgot their beloved people, so they will become to care for family and children in retiring time. They can also enjoy their life and do something they like. Secondly, retiring helps elderly people conserve their health because they do not need to be exhausted on work. They have enough time to sleep and do exercise regularly, not being stress and feel comfortable. The most important advantage is that young people have opportunities to promote and replace the position of the older people. Adults are able to improve and develop new things, which helps society more advanced.
However, beside some advantages it also carries some disadvantages for society. Firstly, the older people usually have much more experience and knowlegde than young people. Their ideas might contribute for society many great achievements, whereas they are forced to retire, which will be a serious wasting . They are still enough enthusiastic to continuously work, but they are compulsory to retire, which may be unfair. Moreover, in many works have not enough the number of employees, and the older people have to retire. This leads to some negative effects on society.
In conclusion, the older people are required to retire, which brings both advantages and disadvantages. Depending on countries, situations, government should have some appropriate policies to avoid negative impacts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, whereas, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26712328767 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68563167669 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5439886478 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.4444444444 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320727168441 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106948251764 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683512528165 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20464088111 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552480910746 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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