In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

Some students decide to take one year off from education to go travelling or getting a job. People have differing views about this notion. I personally believe that its benefits would overweight the drawbacks.

The ones against the idea of one year break between school and university, consider it dangerous and distracting for youth. The most devastating fears of their concern are addiction to drugs or becoming involved in crimes which may happen to that youngsters. They are also worried about the case which scholars may get attracted by the real world, specially when they start earning money while working, or getting stuck by the interesting aspects of travelling. This opponing group believe that the potentially talented students could easily be distracted from their way to success, by choosing short-time enjoyments rather than involving in higher education difficulties.

While the other group opine that noble experience of travelling or working prior to commencing their university studies, would open new ways to scholars. Firstly this will lead them into the journey of self discovery and helps them to identify their strengths and weaknesses that surely influences major and career path choices with raising real passion, also gives them an insight of real life and its challenges which they would face after graduation. Secondly, this gap will widen their outlook by touching other cultures and expands their ability to adopt the unexpected and unknown as well. From my personal stand point, these wider perspectives would definitely have ample effect on their lives and problem solving approaches in the future.

To sum up, there would be immense advantages for this experience. Although, the significance of managing dark aspects of travelling or working for young scholars would be undeniable.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41052631579 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68966536665 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652631578947 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1880948912 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.615384615 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172907292918 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635506193353 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609758012498 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115430423881 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608165755737 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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