In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Some nations urge youngsters to spend the year between graduating from high school and beginning their university studies working or traveling. This trend would create certain benefits but there will also be some drawbacks.
On the one hand, it is clear that young people who decide to take a year out from school before beginning their university studies to work or travel would bring about several advantages for them. One evident strength is that it would help relieve our stress and take a break from our routine. It could be explained by the fact that life is a journey, not a destination. For example, going to a new land can expand your knowledge and let you have real-life experience. Another advantage is working in a gap year can help you develop expertise in your major. Take work part-time as an example, you can build social skills and have a chance to save money for rainy day in your life. Despite surfing the Internet, why don’t you get a basic job and feel a sense of accomplishment?
On the other hand, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. First, too engrossed in discovery. It means that you don’t have time to study extracurriculars to prepare for college. As a result, you will feel peer pressure. Second, it will affect your health if you work too much. In particular, you may take the risk of money and have to stay up late and suffer sleep deprivation. Consequently, dangerous diseases gradually appear and destroy your health.
In conclusion, there are negative points to youngsters who spend the gap year working or traveling regarding students’ health and learning, the upside would emerge consequently in terms of expanding knowledge and developing skills.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in particular, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94444444444 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74893883847 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586805555556 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.490273764 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7647058824 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9411764706 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242301978003 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652750902578 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919493426802 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136075057958 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632474682254 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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