In some culture, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In many countries, parents and teachers always teach children that their dreams will come true if they are diligent enough. While this belief can encourage children to work hard, it may put extra stress on them under some circumstances. I would argue that children are able to achieve some things by working hard but definitely not everything.
To begin with, conveying the message that working hard plays a significant role in achievement has a positive influence on children. As the old saying says that no pain no gain, people need to struggle to have progress on most of the things. For instance, when students spend more time studying, it is highly possible that they can improve their academic performance. In this case, children could be motivated to work hard due to the relevance between efforts and effects. Therefore, it is beneficial to teach children that they have improved when they work harder.
To consider another side, there are various disadvantages if adults over-emphasize the importance of trying hard. People tend to blame themselves for not struggling enough when they could not gain what they have expected. However, in real life, success relies on not only diligence but also other factors, such as luck and timing, which cannot be controlled or predicted by human beings. Consequently, children may live under great pressure or even have some mental health issues. Thus, it is harmful to children to think that they always need to work harder otherwise unsuccess would be totally their fault.
In conclude, teaching children to do their best has productive results for their personal achievement. In the meantime, adults should keep it in mind that diligence is not the only matter, hence should not blame children for not trying hard enough all the time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10544217687 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61992431656 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605442176871 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.6380446964 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.066666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362029462975 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119976226828 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622987534613 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222667823875 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059086379658 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.