In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It has been observed that in some nations, children are taught that if they try hard enough, they can achieve everything. There are both benefits and drawbacks of giving children this message, but I believe that advantages far outweigh the discomforts.
One of the most positive aspects of this encourage message is that it can probably create motivation for children to reach their goals. It is true that these days whenever you want to achieve anything, your inner strength plays a major role. Many students tried really hard before their important exams by solving many exercises because they knew exactly the important of the results. Otherwise, trying the best to reach the goals can remove many illegal actions. When people realize the worth and respect they get from achieve their aims by themselves, they will more treasure it than people who have to exchange for their success.
Despite the benefits, it cannot be denied that there are huge drawbacks to achieve goals by work hard. Obviously, it is clear that people will try hard to reach their goals and not paying any attention to their health. In the long run, it can be a potential harm which cause illness and disease to people. It is common these days to see young generation who lives fast, eat less and do not have time for exercise which can cause many consequences.
In conclusion, it seems to me that encourage children to achieve their goals by their inner strength is a really educated way of create education. Like two sides of a coin, there are many advantages for try hard in order to reach the aim, although this message has some noticeable disadvantages.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46769949879 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2054281747 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.461538462 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321460785895 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115713758 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108889916762 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233931781052 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143392466335 0.056905535591 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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