In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It is thought that the best effort is the exclusive condition leading to individual’s success in some countries. For me, this statement has both perks and drawbacks.
On the one hand, there are numerous benefits when children are told to strive to acquire great achievements. Firstly, this message really does wonders for young adults’ mind. In fact, it helps them have courage and motive to achieve successes. More specifically, children are able to understand that there is no way round to acquire something magnificent without endeavor. Secondly, children can persevere with their goals and dreams instead of quitting in accordance with this message. Indeed, unlike other children, those who are told this message have a tendency of making their best to move on and go forward to accomplish themselves and in particular never rest on their laurels.
On the other hand, everything has two sides: the good and the bad and there is also a large number of disadvantages this message brings to children that needs taking into thorough consideration. Firstly, forcing adolescents to strive to achieve goals accidentally places a heavy burden on their shoulders. That they always have to focus on their objectives to live up to expectations of their parents or relatives can make come down with not only psychological and physical illnesses such as depression, autism and the like. Secondly, another dark side of this message is that it can indirectly have a negative impact on children’s psychology and make them become more and more competitive, ambitious and even greedy. For example, when they cannot attain achievements as great as their friends, they instantly either feel disappointed and pessimistic or become jealous of their friends’ accomplishments. As a result, it is possible that they can be ready to do anything at all cost, even immoral ones to become better than anyone else.
In general, sparing no effort to succeed is both beneficial and harmful for children’s behavior so older people like parents should have a suitable guidance for them to have all-round development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... the good and the bad and there is also a large number of disadvantages this message brings to ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in fact, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23738872404 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93582052725 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584569732938 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2413373235 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258713404338 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788715160566 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357522225687 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128297895538 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826686657453 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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