Some people feel that entertainers( e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Nowadays, the world is developing so quickly that the need for entertainment is increasing. That's why many kinds of amusement is becoming more and more well-known to everybody, especially teenagers. For this reason, a lot of film stars, actresses, actors, singers or sports stars can earn much money from their concerts, films and matches. However, there is still an important job that needs to be paid highly, it is teaching.
The first reason for paying teachers higher is transmitting knowledge. Teachers help students widen their mind with a lot of useful information about all fields such as maths, literature, physics, chemistry and so on. Moreover, practicing lessons held by teachers can help us apply grammar in the real life. Therefore, it will be much easier for us to find a good job with a high salary in the future. Teachers will give us a chance of becoming rich in some day.
Furthermore, there is one special thing is that teachers educate students with personalities. They teach us the way to become a kind, polite and optimistic person. Through their stories, we know more about the world, the people, the lifestyle and memorable lessons about behaviors. As a consequence, teachers can contribute to create a generation who know to make their countries better and better.
Nevertheless, although teaching is an essential factor, it is not unique. Besides enriching our knowledge, we also improve our spirit and health so that outdoor, entertained activities, for example, playing sports, singing and many more, can't be lack. They make us feel comfortable and relaxed after a hard-working day. As a result, famous singers, film stars or sports stars play an important role to help us entertain and give us more courage to study and work which teachers may not give us. However, nowadays, too many famous singers, actresses,actors also make people, particularly teenagers become crazy. They are ready to spend a large amount of money buying tickets of their idols' shows. They are ready to change themselves to become similar to their idols or even many teenagers hurt themselves or suicide just because their idols have boyfriends or girlfriends. This is a big problem in our community which needs to be solved immediately.
In general, not only teachers or entertainers but all types of job are also vital in our lives. In my opinion, entertainers like singers, actresses, film stars and sports stars should be paid lower so that the government has enough money to pay for the other people. And the thing we should do is appreciating each different job though it is a hard work or a job which is not paid highly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...e need for entertainment is increasing. Thats why many kinds of amusement is becoming...
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Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... playing sports, singing and many more, cant be lack. They make us feel comfortable ...
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Line 4, column 549, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , actors
...days, too many famous singers, actresses,actors also make people, particularly teenager...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in general, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 440.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98863636364 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82304474133 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536363636364 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4051039996 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4583333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223018560112 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567039995777 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743484041684 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136395474174 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12212133873 0.056905535591 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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