Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?
Many people believe that professionals in the entertainment field earn well beyond their effort. This essay agrees with their argument and explains about the other professions which deserve better pay.
Firstly, actors, directors become well-known for their performance with the help of media and the internet. As a result, film producers are likely to hire them at any cost. this creates a demand for the professionals and subsequently they tend to act on shows which pays them the most.many people know this and it is thought that actors and directors are paid unnecessarily higher wages compared to other professionals. For instance, according to an article published in daily mail in 2014 a survey of more than thousand fans reported that 80% believe that actors are overpaid and the main reason was their Fame.
In my opinion, there are way more important occupations in the society then the entertaining field which are underpaid. I believe that doctors engineers and professionals who do risky jobs should also be paid fairly higher wages considering the importance of their jobs to the existence of a civilized society. For an example, Harvard University in England surveyed over 2000 students of various faculties in 2015 and reported that 75% agrees that Doctors should be paid well above other occupations. Furthermore, 50% said that people engages in risky jobs such as road construction field should be paid relatively higher wages.
All things considered, I completely agree with the idea that professionals in the entertainment field are being overpaid.I believe that occupations such as doctor engineer and also the people who does risky jobs should be paid will about their current wages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...out the other professions which deserve better pay. Firstly, actors, directors be...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...rs are likely to hire them at any cost. this creates a demand for the professionals ...
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Line 5, column 513, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...aily mail in 2014 a survey of more than thousand fans reported that 80% believe that act...
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Line 13, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... entertainment field are being overpaid.I believe that occupations such as doctor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, so, then, well, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32481751825 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84790588991 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565693430657 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3274640862 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.636363636 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228919995683 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881516852499 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613871373787 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147507102909 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689009870751 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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