In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It is often observed that people in some countries convince the young generation to attain their goals. Moreover, to get the targets youth have to work hard.
Firstly, children get the purpose to study better. In other words, when young people study at school, typically, they do not reflect about their future. Students, who know that it can help them to achieve something, therefore, try to study hard. For example, according to the research British sociologists, more than sixty percent of children who strive to fulfill their goals become successful in their future.
Secondly, this statement can influence the young generation's mind. Сhildren are able to believe adults, whereas, they are able to follow these words and make an effort to be better for their future. Children started to reflect about their behavior and develop themselves. Besides, they are able to become more confident and creative, which gives them the opportunity to create new ideas. And finally young people begin to think about how to attain their wishes.
On the other hand, these words can persuade children in the false hopes. If young people face reality,in this situation, they can be hurt. There are situations, when children, who are intelligent and excellent students, but they can not achieve their purposes. It is connected with very high level of their goals. For instance, The Guardian wrote that majority of young people lose the interest to study, if they do not see results of their works.
In conclusion, I can say that people, who give advice to achieve goals by hard work, stimulate the young generation to be educated. To my mind, the advantages of this statement outweigh the drawbacks, but people have to talk about it with accuracy without forcing children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11379310345 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50669733117 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548275862069 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2914613423 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3888888889 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1111111111 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.44444444444 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253521208467 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834093396842 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517971597552 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147587733113 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04582783564 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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