In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It is often argued whether people have to persuade the young generation to attain their goals by working hard. This issue has various sides, which can influence children.
Firstly, children get the purpose to study better. In other words, when young people study at school, typically, they do not reflect about their future. Students try to study hard, if they know that it can help them to achieve something. For example, according to the research British sociologists, more than sixty percent of children who strive to fulfill their goals become successful in their future.
Secondly, this statement can influence the young generation's mind. Despite children, who believe adults, whereas they follow their words, it can help them to make an effort to be better. Children start to reflect about their behavior, habits and try to develop themselves. Besides, they are able to become more confident and creative, which gives them the opportunity to create new ideas. And finally young people begin to think about how to attain their wishes.
On the other hand, these words can give children of the false hopes. Iif young people face reality, when their attempts do not help them to reach something, in this case, they can be hurt. There are situations, when children, can not achieve their purposes with different reasons from money to health. For instance, The Guardian wrote that the majority of young people can not get a desirable profession due to their health condition.
In conclusion, I can say that the tendency, when people give advice to children to achieve goals by working hard, has a different effect on young people. To my mind, the advantages of this statement outweigh the drawbacks, but people have to talk about it with wariness without forcing children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09897610922 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44850517239 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539249146758 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8995535355 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8823529412 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283025240151 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105839122256 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579355092359 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18146849007 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150383863023 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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