It is true that adults usually told children that they can have whatever they want if they try their best. Although there are some drawbacks of this sentence, I would argue that there are far more benefits.
The main drawback of this trend is that it can lead to children doing wrongful actions which are beyond their ability. Children could think that they may use dangerous things such as knife or cars which can hurt themselves or other people. For example, there was a man who was injured by a car controlled by a 10 years old boy. Additionally, this message could also make children become too competitive and derange relationships around them. For instance, there is a child in a primary school who follow this message stole money from other children and became very embarrassed when others discovered.
Despite the negative mentioned above, I believe that children have to try their best to achieve anything for various reasons. Firstly, they allow to be more creative when they in the process of trying, meaning that they can discover some new things such as confidence, technology or social skill. Secondly, children will create a great habit which will be significant in their future. In fact, many successful people told that they learned how to trying hard to achieve what they want when they were a child. Finally, children also know how to set goals for themselves and trying step by step to achieve the results.
In conclusion, telling a child that trying hard enough for the achievement has both disadvantages and advantages but I still believe that positive sides do outweigh negative ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93014705882 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52656463822 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591911764706 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.3076923077 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.153846154 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463262945236 0.244688304435 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145094319644 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890345719737 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262418374639 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825167255919 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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