In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?
In todays modern society, children are encouraged to try their best to gain achievements. However, there are both benefits and drawbacks of telling them this message.
On the one hand, this message can do wonders for children in different areas in their real life. First of all, children receiving this encouragement tend to acquire better academic results. The more hours children spending on doing assignments, the better marks they gain. For example, whenever my brother gets bad marks in school, my mother always keeps his chin up and inspires him to study harder. Furthermore, this message can get children out of comfort zone to reach higher level not only in life experience but also relationships with other people. It is the fact that friends in school drift apart gradually because they are not engage in holding conversations and mutual understandings. Hence, children should have extra efforts to strengthen their relationships.
On the other hand, this message also has some drawbacks. Besides the intensive efforts, the keys to success involve in other factors such as luck or financial wealth of their family. For instant, if your family is not rich enough for you to pay the fee for children to pursue tertiary education, it is worth encouraging them focusing on practical skills for work in the future rather than studying. In addition, the goals set should be achievable with childrens abilities. Take one of my student as an example, there are some obstacles that he encounters such as listening skills that makes him have bad results in English exams.
In conclusion, there are both benefits and drawbacks for telling this message to the children. However, I believe that the benefits can outweigh the drawbacks in many ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 637, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'engaged'.
Suggestion: engaged
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12237762238 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72289634522 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611888111888 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3507570406 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5625 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22229597623 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747333846918 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444664362976 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127451838862 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397314271488 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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