In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
The issue of whether or not children should be brought up to believe they can have or be whatever they want by working hard has grown in importance over the past few decades. While there are some disadvantages to passing on this message, I personally believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, some commentators justifiably argue that there are advantages to encouraging children to try hard for what they want. From their point of view, this mentality builds children’s confidence, and as a result, they will develop a sense of control over their life and environment. Therefore, in social situations, they are able to present the best version of themselves, and in turn, have a better chance of getting what they are after. It is also maintained that instilling this idea in children results in them developing a growth mindset. When children raised with this way of thinking set their mind to achieve something, they try their hardest regarding that matter. Even if they fail, as a result of this mindset, they are proved to be more resilient, and since practice makes perfect, these children are more likely to be successful in reaching their goals.
On the other hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that children believing in the idea that with hard work, everything is within their reach have some drawbacks. They argue that adults who promote this way of thinking are often oblivious to the obstacles children face because of their family or the society they live in. People keep telling stories of those who accomplished their dreams despite barriers but fail to mention other tens of thousands whose stories did not end well. However, I believe that growing with this mindset helps children stay hopeful in hardships and do their best regardless of the result. As Louis Pastor once said,” Chance only favors the prepared mind,” if one is prepared enough, they will eventually be given the opportunity.
In conclusion, although raising children to believe they are capable of doing whatever they put their minds to might have some drawbacks, the merits are more prominent. With having this idea, children will be more confident in their abilities, and that they can achieve anything, it may just take them longer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61914254796 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543535620053 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 21.507208094 49.4020404114 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2666666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388897840486 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148852843411 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07188806768 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259672166994 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553943862924 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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