In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
There are no shortcuts for success. All those people who achieve their goals and prosper in their dreams are hard workers. That’s why some cultures put a lot of emphasis on hard work from an early age. Even though I believe that there are many advantages of this trend, this essay will discuss both points.
Those who are opposed to it say that this might discourage children from smart-work and cause embarrassment to those who are unable to achieve their targets. Firstly, too much focus on trying harder rather than being smart may lead to loss of innovative thinking among children. They may become good obedient people, but their abilty to think outside the box might be lost. A recent study from Harvard showed that students who went to school for 8 hours did poorly in academics than those who went for only 5 hours a day. Secondly, if a student fails for any reason in reaching his or her goals, they may blame it on themselves for not trying hard enough. This can have a huge impact on their mental health which might ultimtely lead to unneccessary burden. A research looking into depression among teenager concluded that the major reason was feeeling of not being good enough.
While the downisdes cant be disputed, the advantages are way more fruitful. First being the fact that it instils good work ethic among children. This is a useful skill in student and practical life alike, as consistensy and perseverance always yield food results. Napolean is famous for saying that he prefers his generals hard working, not smart. Secondly, hard work ensures a success no matter what. Your wits can take you only a certain distance towards your ambitions, the rest of the journey has to be travelled by honest and hard work. Mr. Hathaway, the famous invester, once said he achieved everything through his good work ethic.
In conclusion, although there might be some risks of encoraging hard work, they can be overcome by being careful. The advantages of excellent working habits and guaranteed future success easily outweigh any downsides.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43872421754 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614942528736 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3115077157 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.55 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201873288226 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555707578919 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043144274048 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122849389438 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166812206312 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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