It is often argued that the command of any musical instruments should be obligatory for children. However, I do not support this point of view. In my opinion, not all children are gifted to play a musical instrument and it would be better to develop different skills by optional.
To begin with, not all young people are talented in music and do not benefit from learning it, by contrast, it may deteriorate mental health. What I mean by this, being obligatory, musical lessons may not only become an extra pressure for students who are already overloaded with school subjects but also evoke an aversive feeling altogether increasing stress level. What is more, it can impact their self-esteem by doing what they cannot do by nature. For instance, poor sense of hearing or not enough flexible fingers to play the piano. Therefore, being forced to take compulsory musical lessons eventually give rise to an aversion and negative affect their mental health.
Turning to the other side of the argument, it is worth noticing the beneficial influence on the stable upbringings of the development of any skills whether be it music or maths. However, what kinds of abilities need to be taught should be decided by students themselves. This is because during training a plethora of difficulties might be faces. For instance, learning a lot of information, going through a considerable number of practices and passing exams. To put it another way, only perseverance, and inspiration from what activity is loved, can help overcome many hardships. Otherwise, it appears to add pressure on children that is not healthy for them.
In conclusion, although many educators hold the view that every child must be taught how to play a musical instrument, I completely disagree. I think it can bring about a detrimental effect on youth mental well-being, thus it would be useful to develop skills by optional.
In today’s world of advanced…
In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?
Some commentators argue that the dominance of such cutting-edge technological devices and scientific research is being greater, the inhabitants who work as musicians, artists and writers are still being respected. This is all because arts can tell us a lot about our life which technology and science cannot.
On the one hand, art can bring us a different view to the way we look and feel the art. Meanwhile science and technology can only give us a permanent view which can not develop our imagination and creativity of ourselves. A telling example is that: The leaves in writer’s eyes illustrate the hope of a peaceful life, if there are any difficulties such as strong wind, rain, storm, the leave will fight to the end in order to keep its existence. However, in people and scientist eyes, leave is just living plants and it helps people to breath. So, arts tell us that inhabitants need to dip into such little thing, also we need to consider it from many angles when confronted with an issue.
On the other hand, the purpose of cutting-edge technological devices and scientific research is for suiting the demand of modern people. They were born to help us about mental health and physical health and can even bring happiness. However, arts can bring us motivation and life lessons for us to non-stop trying. When we feel sad or we encounter something bad, looking at such splendid pictures, listening to music,… can surely bring us back to the mood.
In conclusion, arts play and indispensable role in our daily life. I believe that we can learn a lot from arts that technology and science don’t have.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03821656051 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81372265404 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592356687898 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2803145684 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.875 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279196762705 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864867913187 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782011925937 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175434448235 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380285296527 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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