Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

It is often said that starting to learn the second language before twelve years old is the best timing compared with the older ages. Undeniable, the positive effects are outweighing the negative effects.
There are several evidences to support this statement. At the beginning, it is the easiest time to learn the second language. An international example to this tends would be the fact that the comparison between the Hong Kong locals and the new migrants from China. The English level of Hong Kong locals are better since the education about English subject is completely developed at the Hong Kong primary school, by contrast, we can be clearly seen that the English basis of the China migrants are insufficient as far as the English education in China is lacked. While they may improve their English level later, we can also observe the gap as long as there are different in the primary school environment.
Likewise, the childhood is the most available time because of we just need to care about the time of our favorite television show as well as being the manager of the toys. Hence, it is appropriate to try a new challenge like second language. On the other hand, we have to concern a lot at the secondary school, such as the academic result of the public exam as far as it will influence our prospect. Our time is limited after the childhood and therefore the second language learning at secondary school is worse than in childhood.
In conclusion, as the pain about the second language learning in primary school ages is smaller than in secondary school, the positive feedbacks of this are outweighing the negative feedbacks.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because we' instead.
Suggestion: because we
...he childhood is the most available time because of we just need to care about the time of our...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, likewise, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86785714286 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6143613377 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0296406777 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234215748909 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865341125545 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878452679105 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159974017315 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949392543465 0.056905535591 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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