Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Will this do good or harm to children

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Will this do good or harm to children?

The problem of giving money to school students which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is hazardous while others disagree. However, a few fathers and mothers provide money as gift to institute going minors for good results in academic examinations. In my opinion, giving money to children is a harmful idea. This essay will explain attributing to this trend along with examples in the looming paragraphs.

To begin with, nowadays parents like to encourage children through presenting money for high scores in test which is a less significant solution. Moreover, if people pay ocher to school students, they will be used in inaccurate which will call difficulties. To take an example, little students are unable to know the value of penny for that reason they can lose these anywhere way in anytime. For instance, many children lose money every day in school which receive from fathers or mothers and sometimes they face awful situations at a time. Hence, school authorities as well as parents should be concerned about minors who bring money in school.

On the other hand, numerous young school students prefer to receive ocher as presents from mother and father and most of them depend on drugs which is more convenient at present. In addition, large numbers of individuals busy with career as the reason they are unable to give proper time to own children and the minors like to make friends with harmful students who provide drugs easily instead of money. For example, a number of students from a renowned school in Bangladesh had collapsed by Bangladesh police due to the drugs which had contained in pockets. Thus, parents should avoid the idea of giving money which will be destroyed children's life.

To sum up, according to the arguments one can reach to a conclusion that the drawbacks of giving payments to minors a gift are too dire to ignore. However, everyone should be focused on gift like as money to prevent some incidences in children's life.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98816568047 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55417133015 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550295857988 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.410339711 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.4 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304037649059 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108643127303 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552179149663 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184073810202 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777403327319 0.056905535591 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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