Some people argue that because the Internet makes it so easy for children to access facts, schools should not focus on teaching facts. Instead, they should focus on developing children’s skills and potential, and their relationships with other people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Due to the rapid advancement of technology, every piece of information becomes accessible via the Internet. Therefore, some people are of the opinion that schools should move away from fact-based teaching towards work on skills and relationship building. While I agree that schools should not focus on teaching about facts only, I believe they are still the indispensable foundation for education.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why developing skills and relationships should be a new focus besides mandatory subjects. This is because learning from the Internet offers students valuable information on different subjects. Students can therefore approach lessons on diverse kinds of subjects on the website, as well as on Youtube free of charge. As a result, many children have the capacity to study fact-related subjects by themselves through the easily accessible method of teaching. Furthermore, instead of presenting students facts that could be self-taught, more importance should be given to boosting personal development in terms of skills, talents, and interpersonal capabilities. which have a more practical use for their career in the future.
However, if fact learning becomes inconsequential in schools. there will be some possible drawbacks. If learners do their own online fact-finding research, they could leave out many important pieces of information. This could have an adverse impact on students’ understanding of the concepts learned and their performance at school. Added to this is the fact that some students may also lack the motivation and element of competition that conventional lectures bring.
In conclusion, while learning from the Internet can be practical to a degree, providing students with factual knowledge at schools is still of great necessity due to its practicality in the long run. For that reason, I believe that along with personal skills and relationship development. being the new highlight, fact-based teaching should remain its key role in the education system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57605177994 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08709706775 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588996763754 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2502840841 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.352941176 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348387776475 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979390951433 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708484247997 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207401387366 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851111294886 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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