Some people argue that because the Internet makes it so easy for children to access facts, schools should not focus on teaching facts. Instead, they should focus on developing children’s skills and potential, and their relationships with other people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Thanks to the advancement of technology and the Internet, it has become easier than ever to gain access to factua information. Therefore, many believe that teaching facts is no longer relevant and necessary in school’s cirriculums, and that there should be a shift towards developing skill sets and capabilities of students. Personally, I partly disagree with this view.
On the hand, there are resonable arguments why skills and potentials of a student should be a new focus. Firstly, almost everyone can afford online resources, rendering teaching factual knowledge unnecessary. Therefore, instead of presenting students facts that they could be self-taught, more importance should be given to boosting personal developments in terms of skills, talents and interpersonal capabilities, which have more practical use for students when they enter the labor market. For instance, data analyzing and sorting courses could probably be more beneficial than purely fact presenting classes.
However, if facts learning become inconsequential in school, there will be some possible drawbacks. If left to their own devices, students could leave out many important pieces of information, or, even worse, they might completely neglect fact-related subjects. For example, if some historical events and landmarks, which are as important as building skills, are the subject to retraction in school’s curriculum, students may not volunteerily do research on their own. This would make them in the dark about such fundamental information, leaving an unimaginable consequences on children’s overall development later in life. As a result, along with skills and personal skills being the new highlight, facts teaching should maintain its key role in the education system.
In conclusion, in the informations era, I believe factual subjects should be given equal importance as potential and skills building.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to become'
Suggestion: to become
...ng classes. However, if facts learning become inconsequential in school, there will b...
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Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'consequence'?
Suggestion: consequence
...al information, leaving an unimaginable consequences on children’s overall development later...
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Line 4, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'informations'' or 'information's'?
Suggestion: informations'; information's
...ucation system. In conclusion, in the informations era, I believe factual subjects should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70671378092 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10534168796 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643109540636 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3593468805 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.230769231 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291872170306 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940745030936 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481016242477 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163025077802 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459708920773 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.