Some people assert that it is good for students to have part time-jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Study at college or university requires discipline and hours of self-study. However, despite the needs of study after school hours, I agree with those who feel that students should have a part-time job for three reasons.

The fist major reason is that young ones will have an experience of handling their finance. In current age the most of the population is sink into their debts. This negative trend is caused by lack of experience how to handle a cash in young age. Teenagers feel save with their finance owning to the fact that their guardians fully covering their expenses. Giving an opportunity to experience to cover their non-obligatory expenses not only help them in future, but also will give them a feel of independence.

Secondly, vast of part-time jobs are undoubtedly low-qualified positions in fast-foods, cleaning or delivery. Working in hospitality, cleaning or services is not an enjoyable position for highly motivated students. However, as any other jobs, these positions are essential in modern society. As a result of this, young students will have a chance to look up from the bottom, and in their future life will appreciate the work of those who had chosen their carrier to serve others.

Finally, it should not be forgotten that with money earned from their casual jobs, they can support their already highly cost studies. Some people might oppose, that many governments offer zero interest loans for students and instead of working part-time, young people should intensively focus on theirs studies,I must argue that students will be able to reduce the total cost of their studies and in their future adult life start debt free way faster.

In short, despite the fact, that education requires intensive studies and after school preparation, I strongly believe that working part-time for college and university students will not only built their personality and financial skills, but will also lower their student loans.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, in short, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19936708861 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60962767949 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588607594937 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1409388699 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.357142857 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157571602546 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536679497674 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613771625832 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104335509725 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499062850052 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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