Some people assert that it is good for students to have part time-jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, lots of students are doing part time-jobs for many reasons. Some people say it can be a good way to be taught but the others say it isn't. I agree pretty much on this topic.
Some people say students could be distracted with study which is most important duty of them. Students lose time by doing part time-jobs which had to be use for their study. In my case, I tried to concentrate on my study even working part time. But it was inevitable to lose focus on my study.
However, by working part time, students can experience their interested major or job as a member of group. If students experience in advance, they can choose their career with confidence or get a chance to consider another study to move on when they don't fit. According to a research that i have read, turnover rate of people who have done part time-jobs when they were students was apparently less than who didn't. Also, governments encourages corporations to hire students as a part time-job.
In addition, part time-job help students to set a sence of economy by taking care of money they earned. Students usually get allowance from their parents. So they don't know how to handle the finance efficiently. Doing part time-job can make students to have a thrifty habit.
It is clear that doing part time-job as a student is absolutely beneficial. Therefore, society should provide a chance to work for students to become a person who has strong responsibility.
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Essay evaluation report
which is most important duty of them
which is the most important duty of them
which had to be use for their study.
which had to be used for their study.
students can experience their interested major or job as a member of group.
students can experience their interested majors or jobs as a member of group.
Also, governments encourages corporations to hire students as a part time-job.
Also, governments encourage corporations to hire students as a part time-job.
part time-job help students to set a sence of economy
part time-jobs help students to set a sense of economy
Sentence: In addition, part time-job help students to set a sence of economy by taking care of money they earned.
Error: sence Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Words: 256 350 //put more content. it is very important for a higher mark
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don't repeat same content, like:
Some people say it can be a good way...
Some people say students could be distracted....
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1158 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.523 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.079 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... way to be taught but the others say it isnt. I agree pretty much on this topic. ...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...to concentrate on my study even working part time. But it was inevitable to lose focus on...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...cus on my study. However, by working part time, students can experience their interest...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ider another study to move on when they dont fit. According to a research that i hav...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ove on when they dont fit. According to a research that i have read, turnover rate of peop...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
... were students was apparently less than who didnt. Also, governments encourages cor...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e students was apparently less than who didnt. Also, governments encourages corporati...
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Line 6, column 163, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t allowance from their parents. So they dont know how to handle the finance efficien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, so, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1198.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75396825397 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64205860475 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563492063492 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6462639013 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4705882353 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8235294118 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64705882353 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326948637531 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118657303516 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808741416272 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20504188207 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282826102726 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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