Some people believe that the aging population is good for business, the economy and society. Other, howeve, disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion
The impacts of elderly people on the development of both economy, business and the community were a controversial topic for quite some time. While several people support the idea that the ageing population is good for the growth of these pre-mention factors, many others strongly disagree with it. From my perspective, I believed the advantages and drawbacks of this tendency are both should not be underestimated
On the one hand, there is a variety of advantages that the elderly brings. First of all, it is irrefutable that companies benefit a great deal from the old staff. With their seniority, these workers are obviously equipped with practical knowledge as well as experience. Therefore, they can pass them on the new recruit, who really have a shortage of it. Consequently, this transmission will help improve work productivity and boost economic growth in the long run. As for society, the senior citizen is reportedly to spend more time on community service projects and voluntary activities. Since they are financial stability, they can participate in these local campaigns more often than the youngster
Nevertheless, the demographic ageing is may cause some issues to companies, market and community as well. In the first place, old people are usually considered as less creative and innovation than the young staff. In this competitive and fast-changing world, this characteristic may hinder or even pose a serious threat to the development of a manufactory. Furthermore, as the elderly cannot keep up with cutting-edge technology, the domestic businesses will unable to compete with international organisations and market shares will be in the hand of foreign entrepreneurs, which made the economy lose its autonomy. Regarding society, since the job opportunities are invariable, the elderly may lead to a higher unemployment rate. It is undoubtedly true that old staffs are outperformed the brand-new graduates in working experience. As a result, the youngster may be forced to choose a low-paying job to earn for living
To summarize, the aging population may have the advantages of expert employees and lots of volunteers. However, it may also result in the high rate of unemployment and hinder the development of a company due to their lack of creativity and unable to use the latest technologies
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'recruit'.
Suggestion: recruit
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, however, may, nevertheless, really, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as for, as a result, as well as, first of all, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30894308943 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16694467286 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566395663957 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1073043829 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.4375 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189519148453 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527242398945 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597484667604 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120647063154 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104991455205 0.056905535591 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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