It is believed that enterprises, the economy as well as community can benefits from the population which are growing older. Although it is true that this trend can be advantageous to in terms of such aspects to some extent, I personally believe that the drawbacks are far greater.
The rise in the elderly workforce can be seen as positive due to some reasons relating to business, the economy and society. On a financial level, older staffs tend to have practical skills and valuable experience to pass on to the adolescents, thereby not only improving work productivity but also boosting economic growth. From a socially perspective, it is clear that the elderly people are more willing to participate in community service projects and voluntary activities than the younger generations are. In fact, while I hardly have time to join hands with social responsibilities, such as local environmental campaigns, my grandfather manages to engage in such duties whenever he can.
However, the arguments about these aspects given above can be considered to be more detrimental from the opposite angle, Firstly, this fast-changing world requires a great necessity for keeping up with the latest technology, but the older do not seem to be creative and innovative enough to adapt, which negatively affects the sustainable development of a particular organization or a country economy as a whole. Furthermore, from the social point of view, if younger green staffs have to compete with experienced ones, they might have little chance to get the vacancies, or must accept low-paying jobs. This leads to higher unemployment rates, resulting in a myriad of social evils, petty thefts and robberies, for example.
In conclusion, while the aging population is obviously of financial and social value for local firms, economy and community, I would argue it brings more disadvantages.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...s, the economy as well as community can benefits from the population which are growing o...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('socially') instead an adjective, or a noun ('perspective') instead of another adjective.
...but also boosting economic growth. From a socially perspective, it is clear that the elderly people ar...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld argue it brings more disadvantages.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29431438127 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04793675415 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4236283688 49.4020404114 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.3 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151187405665 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574770645535 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324514840003 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947623692886 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283725679218 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...s, the economy as well as community can benefits from the population which are growing o...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('socially') instead an adjective, or a noun ('perspective') instead of another adjective.
...but also boosting economic growth. From a socially perspective, it is clear that the elderly people ar...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld argue it brings more disadvantages.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29431438127 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04793675415 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4236283688 49.4020404114 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.3 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151187405665 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574770645535 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324514840003 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947623692886 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283725679218 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.