Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
One of the most controversial topics in children disciplinary is whether to give them freedom to make their own decisions in daily matters or not. Although many believe that being free provides children some opportunities to be more confident and responsible, naysayers believes that this could lead them to be self-centered in their future. In following paragraphs both views will be illustrated and followed by a decisive conclusion.
Some people agree to give children authority in making decision relevant to themselves (such as choosing their cloths or arranging their spare time). The first reason coming to mind (to substantiate this stand) is that it results in self-confidence. The more children make decision, the more assertive they will be. As a matter of fact, they become used to make decisions; so, it would be much easier to assert whatever they believe even if it is in contrast with other’s thoughts. Moreover, as children undergo the consequents of their decisions, they become more responsible of future decision they would make and they would think twice before undertaking another decision. Indeed, having liberty of making decisions would benefits them and brings them brighter prospects.
However, others opposed to former belief. In this school of thought, giving Kids freedom to choose between their alternatives is a route cause of being self-important. They say that children get used to gain whatever they want without any restrictions; consequently, they may shun mainstream values in society when they grow up. They might even rebel against some rules in civilization which may cause to social decline. Standing to this reason, naysayers strongly disagree with children freedom in making decision.
To sum up, the former belief seems to be more convincing than latter one. Because not only does it good for individuals to be risk-taker and assertive in future, but also independent members would benefits society rather than indecisive ones. However the negative points would be disappear if parents limit children alternatives and nurture them to consult with reliable people before making decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
... spare time. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate this stand is that it results in self-c...
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Line 3, column 727, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...aving liberty of making decisions would benefits them and brings them brighter prospects...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ividuals to be risk-taker and assertive in future, but also independent members would ben...
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Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...ure, but also independent members would benefits society rather than indecisive ones. Ho...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ts society rather than indecisive ones. However the negative points would be disappear ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, in contrast, such as, as a matter of fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41916167665 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88837597381 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580838323353 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0512971751 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.470588235 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6470588235 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21225988929 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676477760867 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630745913927 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127157751098 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511291998471 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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