Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Since the world is becoming more digitally integrated, technology has become more inextricably interwoven with the field of education. Courtesy of this notion, stances are indicating that students should not have the allowance to utilize their phones at school, while others stand by the idea that smartphones should be put at one’s disposal. I am in favor of the latter viewpoint, of which the reasons will be further elucidated in this essay.
To commence with, admittedly, putting paid to the use of mobile phones at school can increase students’ concentration level. Evidently, in the past when technology was not as ubiquitous as it is in recent days, it is highly probable that students could absorb knowledge more throughout and had a lower chance of zoning out during classes since there were not many distractions. Hence, not using this type of technological device at school may create a noticeably higher level of concentration. To add further credence to my assertion, children will not fall prey to irrational fears of missing out, as their counterparts are in the same situation of not using phones as they are at the moment.
Nevertheless, when turning to the other side of the argument, it is undeniable that offspring might be predisposed to be distracted from the lessons by virtue of the beguiling facet of mobile phones. They might break the rule on the account of being unable to resist the enticement of social media, or games downloaded on their technological devices. Having said that, its necessity can be heightened during emergencies. If they want to call for help, they need to resort to their phone. In this way, it is crystal clear that banning phones can be counter-productive, especially in dangerous situations.
In conclusion, even though the utilization of phones at school might affect the study performance of students, I am of the opinion that allowance of smart devices at school can do wonders for the safety of children, and will not create much negative impact on the lesson quality if there are enough strictures enacted by teachers and supervisors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...es enacted by teachers and supervisors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11014492754 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99290486336 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588405797101 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9974306635 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.615384615 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5384615385 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280063891019 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916099720422 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553499036647 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155694464837 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337632769847 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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