Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well-prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Educating children from a young age is something that must be applied by every parent because it will give birth to children who have a disciplined spirit, but holding full control over children will make children feel burdened and unable to deal with situations that will occur in the future. The presence of teachers and parents can make children realise the importance of rules that must be obeyed by the child so that they can distinguish between wrong and right.
In other words, I agree that every child needs to be instilled with the spirit of discipline both in the school environment and at home. For example, children who have special rules from their parents at home will become accustomed to living these activities so that they make them more disciplined, such as a teacher who makes homework and when at home parents play a role in managing their time in completing their assignments so that over time the child will be aware of when the schedule to do the assignment. However, it is necessary to realise that the rules applied by teachers and parents must be accompanied by the willingness of children so that there is good communication between children and parents and teachers. Furthermore, parents must continue to accompany the child's development so that when the child makes a mistake it can be immediately overcome.
Too much emphasis on the child will make the child depressed. Keep in mind that children who get too much regulation from parents and teachers will make children feel that they do not know the direction of their life because they feel everything is controlled by others. Therefore, there needs to be a balance between the child's will and the rules that are applied so that it continues to run according to mutual desires and does not burden the child.
In conclusion, I believe that every child who is given a good upbringing will instil a good disciplined spirit in carrying out all their activities. However, too much emphasis on children will have a negative effect on the growth of the child's mindset.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 7.30460921844 315% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85142857143 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.641638329 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445714285714 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.8703249365 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.363636364 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8181818182 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284124664179 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1167598034 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705422747799 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183717738795 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532455595745 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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