Some people believe that a country can benefit a lot from university education. Others believe that sending a large number of young students to go to university leads to unemployment. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Recent decades have witnessed the upward spectrum in unemployment rates, raising many questions of the post-secondary education values. Although the benefits related to the university attendance appears legitimate, i believe that sending a large number of young students to universities could be fraught with pitfalls pertaining to joblessness.
On the one hand, it should be acknowledged that a nation could benefit from university education. Specifically, Top-tier education is invariably associated with students’ experiencing a progressive and standardised academic environment. This could act as an incentive for their acquisitions of empirical knowledge and practical skills for certain job specifications, thereby culminating in the educated and highly-trained workforce for the national economic prosperity.
On the other hand, there are many negative consequences related to unemployment when it comes to sending many young students to universities. First, An increase in the number of students attending post-secondary education correlates with a rise in graduated students with prestigious qualifications and sufficient working experience. In fact, this pattern could suggest a causal relationship with a more competitive employment market, pushing those with inferior workmanship to the verge of employment. Second, sending many students to university education irrespective of their potential capacities could erode their ability to make progress in academic performance, thereby limiting their career prospects in the future.
In conclusion, I believe that forcing many students to post-secondary institutions could hamper their social mobility rather than the benefits pertaining to the nation’s development. However, students should capitalize on top-tier education to promote their academic intrinsic aptitude for their future employment prospects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
...iversity attendance appears legitimate, i believe that sending a large number of ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ears legitimate, i believe that sending a large number of young students to universities could be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.37109375 5.12529762239 124% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45584372259 2.80592935109 123% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58984375 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7517087319 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.272727273 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2727272727 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170899877181 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747898963278 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848513677492 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117520387414 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586671611295 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.0946893788 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 14.29 50.2224549098 28% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.96 12.4159519038 161% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.19 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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