Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many opinions think that criminal activities are caused by humans’ nature. While I agree that there are some innate characteristics that are responsible for increasing trend of crime, I would argue that primary reasons lead to offend should be social problems and poverty.
There is a belief that some personalities of children determine whether or not they become offenders. Firstly, people who are cruel and easily prone to aggression have higher rate to turn into crime of violence than kind kind. For instance, children who usually bullying other boys or girls in their schools probably are found guilty of violent crime in the future. Secondly, laziness and selfishness are also potential causes, which breed future offenders since people tend to acquire easy money without working hardly. People who have these dispositions consider stealing property from others as an ideal option to earn a living instead of legal jobs.
Although some negative innate characteristics probably raise criminal rate, I assume that primany reasons are responsible for illegal activities are related to social problems and poverty. In terms of social problems, unemployment is a typical example since this problem raises the criminal rate. Unemployment pushes people into resorting to crime because they simply cannot find a job to become helpful citizens. Secondly, in many undeveloped countries, poverty is really a severe problem as the number of offenders has climbed because of it. In these countries, the poor have to struggle for earning a living day by day and keeping their families surviving and they have no choice apart from turning to a career of criminals.
In conclusion, while many people think that personal personalities lead to offense, I believe that offenders primarily stem from instability of society and poverty as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ome personalities of children determine whether or not they become offenders. Firstly, people ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: kind
...ate to turn into crime of violence than kind kind. For instance, children who usually bul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3598615917 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74656799157 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595155709343 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4621224714 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.153846154 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210103567967 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711700465885 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037420590402 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134186418637 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196884186397 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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