Some people believe that one world government would be better than a national government. Do you think the benefits of this system outweigh the disadvantages?
As attention is paid to a global contemporary trend, international integration, some people believe that a centralized government would be more ideal rather than separated national authorities. Notwithstanding undeniable benefits, drawbacks are more noteworthy.
There is a prominent advantage associated with this trend. People often argue that cosmocracy provides a key access to a successful knowledge economy, particularly for developing and undeveloped countries since adequate education is the driving force behind this prosperity. By activating a global governmental protocol, modern teaching methods and human resources are able to be distributed similarly across continents and culture.
On the contrary, in the prospective outlook, the advantages of an exclusive global authority seem to be outperformed by the disadvantages. I would argue that everything correlated to internationality tends to be comprehensive instead of being specific. As a result, critical situations connected to religious disparities between nations are hard to be mitigated. The battlefield of the Middle East is often cited as an example because according to statistics established by the United Nations, millions of death has been recorded due to terrorism and misunderstanding among Muslims. In addition to this, a sole all-powerful entity can lead to serious political issues. This is primarily because they have the capability to abuse their ability to serve their own interests, usually linked with making profits which is known as corruption.
To put things in a nutshell, cosmocracy is undoubtedly advantageous in some aspects, generally speaking, however, drawbacks seem to be far more extensive. I would recommend that individual governments should develop potential technologies and economic power to solve their problems initially to reduce possible threats when collaborating on a global scale.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'key access'.
Suggestion: key access
...le often argue that cosmocracy provides a key access to a successful knowledge economy, part...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, similarly, so, in addition, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92700729927 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43189137598 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.678832116788 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7600350813 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.923076923 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198120146542 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603989493253 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066882182804 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120191969728 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608128284878 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.11 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.07 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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