Some people believe that parents have a great influence on children’s growth but influences from the outside play a more important role. Do you agree or disagree?
One of the highly controversial issues today relates to what element influences a child's growth more: parents or the external world. Personally, I firmly believe that family is the most important factor in overall child development by the nature of attachment given during childhood and parenting styles used thus affecting their behavior.
Truth be told, parents provide bonding and first relationship as well as a supportive and secure environment for their kids unconditionally by nurturing and protecting them. Obviously, due to their curiosity and immaturity, children are easily tempted to some forbidden acts like using illegal drugs or stealing money. That makes the part of the parents' guidance and supervision much more significant. Furthermore, if a child wants to take a piece of advice from someone, definitely parents are the one willing to lead them in the correct path and distinguishing between the right and the wrong, not the other people.
Besides, styles of parenting have a big effect on child development, as well. Taking an idiom -"Like father, like son" - as an example, children tend to notice and imitate parents' behaviors because they regard parents as their ideal "role models". So, they are able to form as well as develop their confidence, socialization skills, morals, values and views on life through their interaction with parents at the early ages.
In conclusion, although, there may have a few effects coming from outside, I apparently believe that the parents' influence affects the cognitive development of a child to be a good or bad person from his or her core.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, first, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32558139535 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96614569835 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662790697674 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.4942264605 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.4 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226876264602 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839323324393 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501079328464 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136003472158 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290184190116 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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