Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents,
while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these
views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence.
The ideas of person's intelligence, whether it is inherited from the parents or the environment factor continues to be controversial. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will explain below.
On the one hand, those who support parental inheritance as the main factor claim that people who skilled in music, undoubtedly, mostly come from musicians' family. In the biological aspect, children's' cognitive is affected by genes of parents especially from mothers, where if the parents are expert in music, the children would be probably inherited. In fact, There is numerous well-known singer who was born from a singer mother or father. For example, In Indonesia, Kevin Aprilio and Ahmad Dhany Family, it is popular as musician family. Furthermore, it might be said that appropriate manner of mother during pregnancy until postpartum treatment could bring a positive effect on children's brain development.
On the other hand, the opponents of parental inheritance are able to cite evidence from the environment, where that gene of parents have apparently not influenced person's intelligence. The intellectual could grow when children involved in formal schooling. In the societies, it is believed, Attending school early and regularly might enhance cognitive abilities. This is because school activity plays an important role in boosting brain power and memory. Moreover, consuming a toxic substance is apart of environmental factor, where has a significant effect on the decline of cognitive function. The poisonous substance - for instance, alcohol and drugs - affect neurological development and thus affect person's IQ.
Overall, I would tend to side with the opponents of parental inheritance. Although parents inherit the intelligence to their children, The environmental factor still dominates highest.
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a part of' or 'apart from'?
Suggestion: a part of; apart from
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63138686131 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04075749677 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627737226277 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3199977393 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.866666667 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181215140278 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577480320406 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701298806763 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123855949238 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416145178909 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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