Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others believe there are other factors.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others believe there are other factors.

There is a perspective that being wealthy has a direct relation with personal happiness. Another side thinks that it is not enough reason to gain happines. This essay will argue both of views.

To begin with, money fulfill people's basic requirement of life. A person does not need to think hardly about how to buy food, where he will live or how to pay a doctor if he was sick. To be noted, those worriness usually drive people to a depression. Moreover, a wealth gives physical comfort in a life. For example, a person who owns car does not need to walk to a station for working or feel the hot of sunlight.

Somehow, personally I believe that dollars only a tool to reach happiness through physical ease. A happines contains deeper meaning than that. A person who usually going by airplane will not feel it as a luxuriness anymore. The satifaction feeling will be decreased. The economical value of wealth will only stand for a while.

This is why, for being happy, a person needs more than treasures. He needs something that will stand longer. For instance, love of family. The warm hug of mom will touch deeper through his heart. This is why it has no expired time. Mother's love will flow forever. Another example, when somebody does his passion in life. This will make him happy, because he does it by love not a pressure.

Based on those reasons, I absolutely believe that money is a direct tool to reach a joy, but only for a moment. Also, it is only small part of full pleased feeling. The bigger part of person's feeling only can be filled with love.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'think'.
Suggestion: hardly think
...ment of life. A person does not need to think hardly about how to buy food, where he will li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57092198582 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38378331992 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567375886525 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9499151078 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.7083333333 106.682146367 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.75 20.7667163134 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119333297378 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315857410886 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481691525446 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074139993975 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357469800846 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 13.0946893788 46% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 50.2224549098 154% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.04 12.4159519038 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.7795591182 56% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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