Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to
a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight
after school. Discuss both views.
Nowadays, there has been a growing debate whether it is a better way for young
people to continue study at higher education institutions such as college and
university or to work after graduating from school in order to achieve early
success. While there are benefits to working/ having early employment after high
school, there are also good reasons why students should proceed their education
further.
On the one hand, working straight after school is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly, young people can start making money earlier that those who have to go to
university. Therefore, they can afford their own living expenses, become more
independent and mature. This advantage also helps them to ease the financial
burden for their family. Secondly, those people/ they are more likely to make a
faster/ more advanced progress/ fast track to a successful career since they do not
have to spend many years in university or college. Instead, this amount of time can
be converted to earning working experiences in some specific areas. As a result,
they can be more attractive/outstanding to employers who look for employees that
have/ those having practical knowledge and skills.
On the other hand, there are many benefits to having higher education after high
school graduation. First, universities or colleges prepare/ equip young people
with higher-level qualifications, which is what most employers requirement these
days/ as a certificate for their abilities and knowledge, which most employers
want to ensure/ expect. In addition, as a consequent of globalization, the job/labor
market is becoming increasingly demanding and competitive. Thus, it is obvious
that candidates with eligible qualifications can open the door/ can easily and
securely get access to better employment prospects. Furthermore, university
graduates can expect a much higher salary than those without equivalent education.
For example, in Vietnam, job seekers who hold degrees in finance or medication
are offered impressive salary ranges amount along with other benefits such as
paid holidays, insurance and bonus. However, as a matter of fact, those without
degrees are not trusted for professional positions; instead, they must start from
basic and low-paid tasks to acquire sufficient requirements for the job, not to
mention it may be impossible to become a doctor or lawyer without having the
relevant degree.
In conclusion, it seems evident that working right after school and getting higher
education/ joining the workforce and continuing their education beyond high
school level each have their own unique advantages. People should consider their
career option and individual preference to make the decision regarding this matter.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 19, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employers'' or 'employer's'?
Suggestion: employers'; employer's
...evel qualifications, which is what most employers requirement these days/ as a certifica...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90929681135 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57619047619 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5096652726 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.833333333 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0555555556 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 34.0 4.38176352705 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174238479486 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552286358818 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488919439461 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428506703698 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483079610198 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 19, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employers'' or 'employer's'?
Suggestion: employers'; employer's
...evel qualifications, which is what most employers requirement these days/ as a certifica...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90929681135 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57619047619 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5096652726 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.833333333 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0555555556 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 34.0 4.38176352705 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174238479486 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552286358818 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488919439461 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428506703698 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483079610198 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.