Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age This is called peer pressure Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages

Essay topics:

Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others
in the same age. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages
outweigh the advantages?

It is undoubted that there are a lot of arguments about the effect of “peer pressure”
on youngsters. From my perspective, this phenomenon can lead to both benefits
and drawbacks.
On the one hand, young generations’ being affected by others can bring out some
obvious advantages. First, “peer pressure” is (more) likely to help the youngsters
(to) effortlessly blend into the new community and alleviate the gravity of social
isolation due to/thanks to some similar characteristics and hobbies. Moreover,
“peer pressure” can make a valuable contribution to boosting the cooperation and
solidarity among students in the learning process through teamwork and
discussions. Finally, the young try their best to not only improve themselves but
also to achieve an ambition. In this ways, their determination is emphasized.
On the other hand, “peer pressure” also results in some adverse demerits. There is
no denying of that the omnipresence of this circumstance would make the young
people become more envious and allocate their time and money to keep up with
their friends. Some girl students, for instance, squander their tuition on buying a
first-class handbag like the one their friends have. Furthermore, it is certainly true
that youngsters are bound to find it hard to express their distinction and creativity
when they are in a group in which everyone is the same because of being afraid of
boycott and abomination.
In conclusion, it seems to me that peer pressure can lead to some significant merits
to the young besides (some) inevitable setbacks. As a result, young people should
know the best ways to take advantage of this phenomenon.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...es but also to achieve an ambition. In this ways, their determination is emphasized...
^^^^
Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[1]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'boycotts'.
Suggestion: boycotts
...is the same because of being afraid of boycott and abomination. In conclusion, it see...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05456256092 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603773584906 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5351523353 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.076923077 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.38176352705 479% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256633942871 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899171469528 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390755234305 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657209331297 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403492705234 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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