Some people believe that unpaid community service be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children)To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been a growing concern about how to increase high school students’ social engagement. This has led to a suggestion that community volunteering should be integrated into part of the school curriculum. In my opinion, I strongly subscribe to this idea to a large extent for three reasons.
To begin with, a synthesis of student volunteering and the school curriculum is one of the most effective pathways to inculcating in high school students a sense of empathy, which is an important skill they will use for the rest of their lives as they are growing into compassionate adults. Whether through one-time projects like collecting canned goods for the local homeless or ongoing programs like biweekly visits to a nursing home and a children’s cancer center, high school adolescents are given plenty of opportunities to enhance their ability to understand other people’s feelings and predicaments. Not only would they come to realize how lucky they are but they would also start putting themselves in another person’s shoes. Through their commitment to unpaid community service, they are more likely to identify with people’s misfortune and succor the needy.
In addition, community volunteering should be made part of school programs as it plays a critical role in developing students’ new skills and gaining work experience. The hands-on experience, whether it is basic or trivial, might provide building blocks for future success. For instance, if a high school volunteer is assigned a task of reimbursement at a local charity, he or she needs to plan and prioritize work lest this extra work affect his or her schoolwork. Then, after managing and sorting the receipts of donors, this student has to learn how to use Google spreadsheets to keep track of inventory and donations. These work-related skills that cannot be acquired from school books are, in fact, the very foundation for a job in management, accounting, or running a small business. Since gratuitous community service offers a space where students can gain new skills, open their eyes to something different, and give back to their community, I consider it feasible to fuse volunteering into high school programs.
Last but not least, integration of volunteering into school education can brighten up high school students’ curriculum vitae. It is generally acknowledged that volunteer experience can set an applicant apart from his or her competitors in the process of applying to a prestigious university as this experience shows the volunteer is willing to make contributions to his or her community without asking for monetary compensation. What is more, these altruistic qualities are usually what admission officers look for. For example, the University of Cambridge receives tens of thousands of applications from worldwide straight-A students every year, yet it filters out those academically outstanding applicants with little or no volunteer experience. Since student volunteering might affect college applications, I insist that it should become an integral part of high school curriculum
To recapitulate, the idea of incorporating voluntary service into part of schooling is completely viable because it enhances students’ well-being. Not merely does compulsory community service cultivate students’ empathy but it also helps them procure occupation-related skills and increase competitiveness. Owing to the aforementioned three benefits, it is worth motivating students to engage in unpaid community service at school.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, well, apart from, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 41.998997996 186% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3026.0 1615.20841683 187% => OK
No of words: 545.0 315.596192385 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55229357798 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26995746657 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 176.041082164 172% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554128440367 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 506.74238477 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.302523831 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.3 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238262491869 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07940222987 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039536721892 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141676163478 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296220301322 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 78.4519038076 201% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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