Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The young generation is a precious asset for any society, without whom it would never thrive. Nowadays, schools arrange mandatory non-paid social activity for youngsters to make them face the realities of their surrounding world and provoke a sense of responsibility in their conscious. However, some people take issue with this educational policy and believe that it is counterproductive for teenagers. I agree this is a beneficial action due to two major reasons which I intend to provide in the following essay.
First and for most, I strongly am in the conviction that this action could benefit students in terms of social abilities, especially in process of formation of under tacking the responsibilities in the community the will soon enter into it. I recently have read an article about this crucial subject in which scientists have studied the correlation coefficient between obligatory charity activities and the level of responsibility in a young group of secondary school students. This research obviously reveals that there is an undeniable connection within these two criteria.
Second, experiencing the real world atmosphere, i.e. charities, though a controlled environment like programs under the supervision of the school, would help youth generation to become familiar with the reality of the outside world and could pop the illusion bubble of their pre-judgment about their society. My own experience is a good case in point. When I was a teenage boy, I was a perfectionist and used to have a false imagination about the world, until our school forced us to go to a less than a wealthy neighborhood and distribute food among poor. This event not only has had a profound impact on me but it also has helped me to adjust my perspective to my society much more realistically. Science then, this tremendous incident has provoked a sense of empathy in my conscience. Had not I witnessed that atmosphere, I would have never realized about the real meaning of poverty.
Overall, as I mentioned, I totally share this attitude for two important facts. This serves as both students’ social character booster and their reality vision adjuster. Eye must not be lost of this fact that this practice needs to be executed under direct petrol of the school’s officials, owing to an uncontrolled unpleasant experience could have a life-time malicious effect on them. As a result, putting this sort of action into practice is of vital importance, if and only if it be held under fitting controlling measures.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 494, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
... of vital importance, if and only if it be held under fitting controlling measures...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, sort of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 410.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15365853659 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07748535681 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590243902439 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8415552593 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.294117647 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0888170654217 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299791267928 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354175745735 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615330487534 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430671164646 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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